tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1803854391640222787.post929652864582622245..comments2023-06-10T12:33:38.632+01:00Comments on PEOPLE DON'T EAT ENOUGH FUDGE: WoW - The ConflictSarahhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04402703967636964187noreply@blogger.comBlogger18125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1803854391640222787.post-22085726128537003232011-09-23T09:12:59.216+01:002011-09-23T09:12:59.216+01:00I've been really slack on commenting on here. ...I've been really slack on commenting on here. I think if anyone takes the time to say something then the very least you deserve is an individual reply so thank you and apologies and here they are :)<br /><br />Thank you Lene - there may be another post explaining why she needed the money at some point. I'm glad he didn't get the wine rack, it did go to a really nice lady who wanted it for a wedding present (which funnily enough is how I got it:).<br /><br />Thanks KD, I've done a couple of car boots in the last few weeks and It's really inspired me to clear out all the stuff that's been hanging around for ages so not only is my house feeling lighter and more spacious but I'm making some money too. A real win/win :)<br /><br />It was desperation to start with Melissa, a way to make some money for something really important and the good news is that it worked!<br /><br />Thanks Car. I avoid dialogue sometimes because I find it pretty hard but I decided I needed to try and get over it. <br /><br />Basing it on real conversations helped.<br /><br />In reality possibly not everyone is queuing up for the guy in the second story but he is one of the good guys and available so he certainly has options.<br /><br />There are always people who want something for nothing Anne but memories have a value although in this case I don't think any amount of money would have persuaded her to sell anything to him.<br /><br />A cuppa and a chat, now that would be lovely (you bring the cake, I'll stick the kettle on;) xx<br /><br />Thank you Stephanie, sometimes feeling and emotions are so hard to describe, words just don't seem to do them justice.<br /><br />Ha ha, her friend DOES know Sheri and she understands but she wants her to move on and be happy and she thinks this guy is the right thing for her.<br /><br />Thank you Jayne, there was an element of desperation to it all, it was very important. Sentimentality had to be put to one side and in the end, it was worth it :)<br /><br />Thanks Suzi, there are some answers and explanations to come but I agree, sometimes it's better to leave some things unsaid and let the reader use their imagination.<br /><br />Thanks Karen, I will expand on the first story at some point.<br /><br />In the second, he isn't actually her boyfriend. He is someone she is very close to and has strong feeling for but he wants so much more than that and she doesn't know if she can ever give him what he deserves.<br /><br />What makes Rock Chick tick? I'm not sure even she knows the answer to that right now :)<br /><br />Thanks AS, maybe the more I write the more it will become clear, I'm not sure of the answers myself.<br /><br />Thank you Jayne, there is a very strong link between the bangle and her heart.Sarahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04402703967636964187noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1803854391640222787.post-89555591009644887562011-09-23T03:49:57.176+01:002011-09-23T03:49:57.176+01:00I was drawn right into both stories immediately.
...I was drawn right into both stories immediately. <br /><br />Loved the bangle/relationship metaphor in the second story. Beautifully written, Sarah!Jayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16744785002688814128noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1803854391640222787.post-76010796837159484472011-09-23T03:46:00.939+01:002011-09-23T03:46:00.939+01:00I loved your description of the guy in the first o...I loved your description of the guy in the first one - what a geezer! Took me back to my 11 years in London.<br />Like Karen, I want to know what makes Rock Chick tick too, & was wondering why she had to sell her memories, not commit etc. But your writing is wonderfully descriptive & readable.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1803854391640222787.post-68129426848165142122011-09-22T14:45:56.365+01:002011-09-22T14:45:56.365+01:00Ha ha, thank you Andy. I will pop back and offer ...Ha ha, thank you Andy. I will pop back and offer a couple of suggestions (they really are only very small ones on grammer and context:).<br /><br />I've been reading all the comments (thank you all x:) and I would like to expand on both of these stories. In fact, I have written another post which fits with this weeks prompt giving some of the back story to the man in the second one.<br /><br />It's a little longer than 200 words and could possibly fit in somewhere else but, if Gill has no objections then I will post it alongside this weeks.Sarahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04402703967636964187noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1803854391640222787.post-47342664255552543152011-09-22T14:15:39.117+01:002011-09-22T14:15:39.117+01:00The first one is interesting but I like the second...The first one is interesting but I like the second one much better. The rock music I am listening right now doesn't interfere with my concentration on the emotions that rock chick conveys. You can make a reader really focus on your story and feel it. You rock!<br /><br /><br />P.S. I really won't hold grudges if you could give me your corrections on my entry, I find it helpful no matter how small it is.hehe..<br /><br /><br /><a href="http://www.wordsandpen.com/2011/09/write-on-wednesday-search.html" rel="nofollow">Andy</a>Andyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01880911404474923812noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1803854391640222787.post-88957132026029378722011-09-22T10:38:42.444+01:002011-09-22T10:38:42.444+01:00I really want to know what is motivating rock chic...I really want to know what is motivating rock chick. Why does she need to sell all her memories? Why does she need the money?<br />Likewise, in the second I really wanted to know why she didn't want to commit to her boyfriend.<br />I like the way you write, your pace is great, loved the imagery of the cup with blueberries and collecting waxy apples, but I want to know what makes rock chick tick. Don't hold back! Your writing could really sing Sarah. :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1803854391640222787.post-41857710291770281342011-09-22T04:24:16.113+01:002011-09-22T04:24:16.113+01:00Beautiful writing as always! I really loved both o...Beautiful writing as always! I really loved both of them, so many unanswered questions I'm left hankering for more - yet sometimes there is more beauty in the unknown than a conclusion as each reader takes from it what they need, nothing more, nothing less. Well done, I look forward to next week!Suzi - Under The Windmillshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05837824105735439845noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1803854391640222787.post-30562697036205524782011-09-21T15:11:24.806+01:002011-09-21T15:11:24.806+01:00I loved both! You write so poignantly-as others ha...I loved both! You write so poignantly-as others have said. I love the mix of desperation and sentimentality in the first. I can relate to it lolJaynehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15772862427317598066noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1803854391640222787.post-41511472285874364312011-09-21T14:04:36.851+01:002011-09-21T14:04:36.851+01:00This comment has been removed by the author.Sarahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04402703967636964187noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1803854391640222787.post-85429989168413822872011-09-21T00:12:53.031+01:002011-09-21T00:12:53.031+01:00I really enjoyed the second one! Though I must adm...I really enjoyed the second one! Though I must admit, I felt a little like shaking your character and telling her to spit it out, just say what it is she thinks is stopping her! Mostly because I wanted to know, but also a little because I'm a 'fixer' and in the place of her friend I'd want to give her the best advice I could but need to be informed first.Sheri Bombhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18220906981157426429noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1803854391640222787.post-79087152743833283382011-09-20T23:12:21.152+01:002011-09-20T23:12:21.152+01:00Both of your pieces are lovely, but my favorite is...Both of your pieces are lovely, but my favorite is the 2nd one. <br />I could feel the emotion that this woman was going through -- the pressure of telling her friend how she was truly feeling. <br />Beautiful work!! :)Stephaniehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03733516439846527903noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1803854391640222787.post-80151197668768654492011-09-20T14:31:35.323+01:002011-09-20T14:31:35.323+01:00Hi Sarah. It was interesting to read that there...Hi Sarah. It was interesting to read that there's still people in your neck of the woods who want something for nothing from a car boot sale! LOL<br /><br />I found the second story fantastic to read (as I did the first one) but it was particularly moving. I'm thinking I'd love to sit down with you (or Rock Chick I should say) and have a pot of tea and a good chat. I think we'd have a lot in common.<br /><br />Anne xxDomesblissityhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07270409725826410919noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1803854391640222787.post-81886324135492366052011-09-20T09:53:38.778+01:002011-09-20T09:53:38.778+01:00I love the first piece, I wanted to grab the girl ...I love the first piece, I wanted to grab the girl at the end and say 'what, what is more important than her memories' you described the sleazy guy really well and your dialogue was awesome - that is one area I am sadly lacking in and I need to work on!!! <br /><br />The second piece was also really good, but I wondered about this guy. Why would everyone be queuing up for him? I would love to know more of his back story.Carhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17412323070595507627noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1803854391640222787.post-90633515004769703122011-09-20T05:30:50.341+01:002011-09-20T05:30:50.341+01:00I liked the first one best, though they were both ...I liked the first one best, though they were both good. I also wish I knew what happened to bring her to that point, and what happened next.Melissahttp://www.melissagijsbers.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1803854391640222787.post-61745997544037538422011-09-19T14:39:36.294+01:002011-09-19T14:39:36.294+01:00Both pieces really made my mind wonder about what ...Both pieces really made my mind wonder about what was going on beyond the moment you wrote of. My fav was the first one(went through that a couple of weeks ago)but you did a great job with both and you have me hanging on what will happen next.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16732006064321712054noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1803854391640222787.post-31393147048377760052011-09-19T02:27:35.996+01:002011-09-19T02:27:35.996+01:00I agree with Adam about #2 being incredibly poigna...I agree with Adam about #2 being incredibly poignant. I really love the way it's written and am dying to find out what is holding her back.<br /><br />I also really enjoyed #1. It left so many unanswered questions. What does she need the money for? Why does it matter more than her memories. Fascinating stuff! I agree with her about not selling anything to dodgy client #1...I wouldn't sell him anything either!Lenehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01967670281829933493noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1803854391640222787.post-38361619486374944232011-09-19T01:04:52.176+01:002011-09-19T01:04:52.176+01:00I can see how that would have been confusing! :) ...I can see how that would have been confusing! :) I've made the distinction between the two a little clearer so hopefully it wont confuse anyone else.Sarahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04402703967636964187noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1803854391640222787.post-27489242798321400432011-09-19T00:55:44.629+01:002011-09-19T00:55:44.629+01:00I liked the second best. Poignancy abounds!Good st...I liked the second best. Poignancy abounds!Good stuffs.<br /><br />I must have missed the bit about there being two stories because first time I read I got really confused and the felt a bit of a div when I reread the introduction!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com