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Tuesday, 29 November 2011

WoW - The Bangle

Write On Wednesdays







Write On Wednesdays Exercise 26 - Look at the photo at the top of this post. What does it inspire in you? Set your timer for 5 minutes. With the photo in mind, write the first words that come into your head until the buzzer rings. If you aren't a visual person, you could try lighting a few candles and writing by candlelight. Different sensory experiences can be useful for inspiring creative writing so please play around to make the prompt suit your writing needs. If you do try writing by candlelight, let us know. I'd love to know how it works for you!


I don't know if Rock Chicks story will ever be put together in any meaningful way.

I guess that may be a reflection on real life.

What I do know is that to really begin to understand her you have to first know the story of the bangle which I haven't told up until now.

Part of the reason for that being that it's pivitol to the story and is the thread running throughout it.

Getting it right is very important to me.

I really don't want to get it wrong.

I hope I haven't.


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The Bangle




She woke up smiling.

It was the way she woke up every morning.

As though a thousand candles lit her soul and illuminated her life.

Today was her Birthday.

But that was of secondary importance.  Tonight she would see him and so the day was just a countdown of hours until that time.

For a moment she reflected on the contrast between this year and last.

The complete and utter despair. The terror and the loneliness.

The feeling of failure and emptiness.

All of that was gone.  Replaced by a feeling of rightness.

"Happy Birthday beautiful".

He walked towards her holding a small bag

This was home.

This was where she belonged.

She felt she had finally found her forever.

"Tell me if you don't like, I wont mind, I can change it" he said slightly nervously.

Smiling she shook her head.

Whatever the bag contained had been chosen with thought and care.

Of COURSE she was going to like it.

Taking the box from the bag she opened it revealing the bangle

He held his breath as she caught hers.

There was no need for pretence.

The delicate silver wire wound it's way around the beautiful turquoise stone.

She slid it onto her wrist.

Glanced up at him she saw a frown still furrowed his brow.

"I love it" she said throwing her arms around him burying her face in his neck.

"I love you" he whispered through her hair holding her as though he would never let her go.

12 comments:

claire said...

That was wonderfully romantic! I liked the interesting way you used the prompt while still sticking to a story you knew. I wish my birthdays were always as special as that!

Sarah Mac said...
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Sarah Mac said...

Thank you Claire - often I have a story and then have to find a way to fit it around the prompt.

I'm glad you like it.

I wish all my Birthdays were that special too.

Janelle said...

I feel so happy for Rock Chick! Her comparison between this year and last is very much how I feel about my own year and last actually.
Is the bangle in the picture your own?

spring days, new growth said...

And if the bangle is your own, does that make you Rock Chick.. haha?
No don't answer that...
I adore love stories, I hope RC has a happy ending!
You've written joy, romance and love into this piece and you have done the bangle proud!
Kate

Emma @ Mummy Musings said...

Oh, that's wonderful!

pam said...

Beautifully written as ever Sarah, there will be another bangle birthday! Hope you don't mind but I wanted to prove that we have parallel lives at this particular moment in your life cos I know you love Julie and Julia. http://tornadofiles.blogspot.com/2011/04/coincidences-2.html

Fiona @nlpmum said...

Ahhhhhh true romance!

TV said...

That was lovely. Romance like that is hard to find :) I'm living vicariously through your writing.

InkPaperPen said...

Did you feel like you got it right? I thought his apprehension was beautiful, waiting to see if she liked it. Rock Chick's story is moving, slowly but surely, keep unfolding it, Sarah.

I love how you work the prompts to your story. Just what I like to see!

Feisty Cat said...

Damn, Sarah M. Now I have to go back and read the beginning of Rock Chick's story.

Seriously, this piece is romantic without being gushy. I like that. I also love that it has a somewhat melancholy air to it, an edge if you will. I could be wrong, but that's what it feels like ...

--FC

Zanni Arnot said...

Beautiful piece. I felt it was very real. I was interested to see how you used the prompt :)