Friday, 21 September 2012

Five Sentence Fiction - Zombie

This weeks FSF prompt is zombie ....  Ummm, thanks Lille ;)

Not only have I never written horror, I've never watched much either and I wasn't entirely sure what a zombie really was.

So, in my quest to know everything I popped over to google.  Many cultures believe in the existence of zombies and they take several different forms.

'According to the tenets of Vodou, a dead person can be revived by a bokor, or sorcerer. Zombies remain under the control of the bokor since they have no will of their own. '

As I wanted to continue with last weeks story  I have used this as a 'loose' basis for this weeks piece:

Barely noticing the cool damp air touching her face, the weak warmth of the sun as it struggled to burn through the early morning mist, the sweet cloud of lavender that filled the air as she brushed past or the cobwebs glistening like jewels in the hedgerow she was empty, devoid of all emotion.

One foot in front of the other, her mind so far detached from reality it was as though she were moving out of sync with the rest of the world as it rushed past her in a blur of colour and noise.

For a brief moment last night she had made her own choices, controlled her own destiny, her soul set free so that finally, finally she could find herself again.

 Or so she had thought ...

For only the foolish could believe that the bokor would willingly relinquish that power.


Andrew Swingler said...

I had to look up Bokor. I really like what you did here.

Anonymous said...

I love that I'm not the only one who did a little research before writing. We must have found the same Wikipedia entry. Great story.

Anonymous said...

This was very nicely done, Sarah!
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Sarah said...

I came across Bokor when I ws looking up zombie Andrew and it gave me the idea of how to use the concept in a way that fitted with my story. Glad you enjoyed it.

I think we did Sharry. Im a bit of a knowledge junkie which may or may not be a good thing, glad it's not just me :).

Thank you Ann.

injaynesworld said...

I had trouble with this prompt, too, for the same reasons. You pulled this off beautifully. Congrats!

kate n said...

I too struggled with Zombie but I liked the challenge, I liked the phrase 'a blur of colour and noise' that was very good at helping me imagine how she felt.

Jazzbumpa said...

By now, she should be getting hungry . . .


C.C. said...

Oo. I didn't know the technical term for that practice. Nicely done for not being familiar with the topic. Very descriptive. :)

Denis Wright said...

Gee. I had a colleague whose name was Bokor. I'll never think of him in quite the same way again!

Nice work again.

Lillie McFerrin said...

Thanks for sharing your Google findings! I'm not all that familiar with Zombies myself.

I really like what you've done with this. It's a great take on the prompt, and is a feeling most of us have all had one time or another! Nice :D